My new Song

yo!!! i create a new song. But is chinese.. i didn't get any idea of EL song. Maybe my mind all fill up with chinese languge. Sory for those who doesn't seem to understand wad i wrote. I will put up HAN YU PIN YIN also. Pls support me. Or maybe give some comment or my lyrics nided to change in any other sentence. Ur maybe can help me tink of the melody.
Thank u very much